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[Frayhard]

Добрый день. Всех форумчан с наступающим Новым Годом и Рождеством!!!

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Dear Ivan and Tatyyana.
Sorry for not writing earlier, but I haven’t had access to Internet for a long time, about four weeks.
I’m writing to thank you for letting me stay with you this summer. I had a fantastic holydays.
I never forget your hospitality, Tanya’s food which is delicious, especially beet-root soup (borchsh) and all time we spent together, of course.
The rock festival “ROK NAD VOLGOY” was incredible. I have never seen so many people in one place. Unfortunately, I have never seen so many drunk men too, but they were quite rational and unaggressive. I have to admit Russian music is good. But Russian language have a lot sounds which difficult for pronunciation of me, and I haven’t been able to join in singing.
For the last three weeks I’ve been very busy finding new job. I’ve had about 10 meeting with  HR-managers from different companies. Now I’m a candidate who  applying for the job in Microsoft. I think I have good chance and I might get offer. It’ll be fantastic if my wish became the truth. You know how much time I’ve been learning about IT-technologies.
Anyway, that’s all for now. Thanks again for everything. Don’t forget my invitation to come to Berlin – my family would love to meet you. The sprig would be a ideal time for visit. The weather isn’t warm and there are few tourists so museums and other sights  are not crowded.
Best wishes.
Emma Ganz.

[Lovenokia]

Я бы исправил следующее:
1. a fantastic holydays (вот здесь нужно уточнить артикль, hoidays - множественное число)

2.  Tanya’s food which is delicious - Tanya’s delicious food (так красивее)

3. But Russian language have - But Russian language has

4. a lot sounds - a lot of

5. would be a ideal - an ideal

[LizzyBennet]

Dear Ivan and Tatyana,

Sorry for not writing to you earlier, but I haven’t had access to the Internet for a long time, about four weeks.

I would like to thank you for letting me stay with you this summer. I had fantastic holidays.
I never forget your hospitality, Tanya’s food which was delicious, especially beet-root soup (borchsh) and all the time we spent together, of course.
The rock festival “ROK NAD VOLGOY” was incredible. I have never seen so many people in one place. Unfortunately, I have never seen so many drunk men too, but they were quite rational and unaggressive. I have to admit the Russian music is good. But the Russian language has a lot of sounds which are difficult for my pronunciation, and I haven’t been able to join in singing.
For the last three weeks I’ve been very busy seeking a new job. I had about 10 meetings with HR-managers from different companies. Now I’m a candidate who is applying for a job for Microsoft. I think I have a good chance and I might get an offer. It’ll be fantastic if my wish became the truth. You know how much time I’ve been learning IT-technologies.
Anyway, that’s all for now. Thanks again for everything. Don’t forget my invitation to come to Berlin – my family would love to meet you. The spring would be an ideal time to visit. The weather isn’t warm and there are few tourists. So museums and other sights  are not crowded.

Best wishes,
Emma Ganz.

[Frayhard]

Спасибо огромное за помощь и исправления. Хотел еще узнать, не слишком ли много кальки с русского языка в содержании? Или текст звучит вполне по-английски?

[LizzyBennet]

Да, калькирование есть.
I’m writing to… По-русски “Пишу вам, чтобы…” можно употреблять в неформальных письмах. Однако в английском этот оборот используется только в официальных письмах.
Например,
I'm writing to complain about the poor quality of service we received in your hotel recently.

Сейчас заметила, что упустила несколько деталей: не I haven’t had access to the Internet for a long time (у меня нет доступа к Интернету в течение долгого времени), а I didn’t have access to the Internet for a long time (у меня не было доступа к Интернету в течение долгого времени).

It will be fantastic if my wish comes true. To come true – устойчивое выражение.

Don’t forget my invitation to Berlin – калькирование. Лучше: Bear in mind my invitation to Berlin.